1. Bona, L (1990). Children today: Head start programs.
Head start along side job corps has been helping young adults improve there lives for over twenty five years. They are opening a new headquarters in San Diego, California. With these new resources they hope to excel in creating successful opportunities for young adults to advance their lives. On top of the children that are enrolled in job corps head start also allows other members of the community to participate. Including children of parents enrolled in "Options for recovery " a local drug and alcohol rehabilitation center.
Hi Brandon!
ReplyDeleteI'm sorry this is a little late- but here goes.
Firstly I'm confused as to what type of article you used. This Citation looks like the Citation for a book. But the language in your Bibliography sounds like it’s more of an article in a news paper. For instance the phrase “They are opening a new headquarters in San Diego, California. With these new resources they hope to excel in creating successful opportunities for young adults to advance their lives.” I am currently studying Public Relations and we work with news and other media to promote new events. That’s why it sounds more like an article to me. I suggest looking at the Owl Purdue site under the “periodicals” page. Though please don’t take any offence to this, as I’m sure my Citations need work too.
I’m really impressed by your ability to summarize! I really understood the topic of the source and what it was trying to say, and you only did it in a paragraph! To me that’s pretty amazing. I have such a hard time with that. Maybe you could give me some pointers?
Anyway I wanted to ask how you felt about the article. In our reading (Writing Analytically) it suggests finding the things in the article you find strange or interesting. So I was wondering what you found in this article that you found either strange or interesting. Why did you choose this article? Also – Head start- isn’t that a program designed more for younger children? I know as a reader this is just my assumption- so I was wondering how it tied in with Job Corps that is for older generation. – Do you think children who start in Head start eventually end up in Job Corps?
I noticed the tie in at the end with drugs and Alcohol. Do you think the Author of the article has a biased against people in the programs? I was also thinking- maybe you could have put more specifics in. You know like the date of the new opening- What specific area in San Diego will it cover?
I know that’s probably not included in the source you used, but its something to be curious about I suppose. I also like your word choice you seem to be very capable of creating a distance from your wrighting! I always have some type of … slant with mine- I really can’t seem to help it. Your Bibliography is very calm and makes no judgments, it’s very straight forward. I think in our reading that’s a suggestion for when you have a source that you absolutely agree with- you want to be more- .. mmm… neutral. Lets see … what else.
Maybe you could have used the source as a “Point Of Departure” – you know summarized in the beginning then continued on with your own thoughts. For instance this source is about a new center opening in San Diego – maybe you could have continued with your thoughts on how many more centers need to open, or maybe we have too many already. Maybe they just need to be better placed. Do you think that the outcomes of places in San Diego will be comparable to places in Boise? I’ve heard a lot from people saying that pan- handlers and homeless are much more aggressive in places like San Diego – do you think that’s a factor in any of this?
I know these are some crazy leaps and questions- I’m good at that lol. But I think using Sources as a starting point is a useful tool and Idea. It can help design a really unique question which can design a unique point of view which creates a unique paper. – blah.. too much uniqueness lol. Anyway I hope that you will take my suggestions and comments with a grain of love. I think yore a great writer ( even tho I’ve onle seen a small portion and will do amazing in this class!!!!!
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